Talk:Star Vs The Forces Of Evil:Loss/@comment-39375661-20190508020923

Also, there are quite a few cliches in this story that I noticed, such as the gruesome commercials and the intro opening with Stars black eyes. These are things you'll want to avoid when writing lost episode stories. Cliches aren't bad, but you have to try and make them work like I did with my Kinect Disneyland Adventures creepypasta; The Shadow Reader even mentioned it in his review of the story. I recommend watching the episode on Shadows channel to get a better idea of what I'm talking about; It's called No Happy Place. Also, I used a fire tablet to write No Happy Place, so that makes me wonder, did your tablet have problems with the grammar system? My fire tablet does the job pretty well, and so does my Samsung Galaxy J3 phone. My advice: try using a laptop to correct the grammar if your tablet is having problems. Also, my Star Vs The Forces Of Evil story is going to be rather disturbing, just so you know. Once it's done, I'll post it on this site.