User talk:ChristianMeans20

Review of www.happykids.com
Honestly, I think that this story would work better if it weren't a series of lists. That seems to be the reason this story got marked for review and then deleted; the format of the story turns it into more of a checklist or the procedures of a school science lab. If you were to turn each of the steps into a separate paragraph, then it probably wouldn't be marked for review.

Also, only the last of the warnings actually lists what will happen. Why don't you add these kinds of consequences to all the other parts of the list, or explain why you didn't in-story? That would be interesting.

One big problem is that there's no reason to actually do this other than curiosity. Is there a reason to do this? Is this just a fun party trick or something? I know, that's a bad joke, but you can come up with whatever justification you want.

However, the most pressing problem is that this isn't a spinoff. You created this, so I think you should try and improve it enough to put on the Creepypasta Wiki. This is why I've deleted it from this wiki. Don't post it here again or risk its subsequent deletion.

Good show. I hope you don't get discouraged. I think this is a rather original and interesting ritual, even if that ends up being its downfall.

Cheers, Squidmanescape (talk) 04:04, July 10, 2018 (UTC)

The Story
A website, titled happykids.com, is dedicated to dead children. It is filled with information and horrifying pictures, all of children who have died tragically, went missing, or committed suicide. You cannot access the website unless you have recently had a near death experience or do the following ritual at exactly 3:05 am:

RITUAL

 * 1) Make sure all the lights are off in your house, except your computer/tablet/phone screen.
 * 2) Bring a teddy bear or other toy to give an offering to the children.
 * 3) Light 10 yellow candles in a straight line row in front of you.
 * 4) The candles represent the children.
 * 5) Lastly, once the clock strikes 3:05am. Chant the following words: "Fallen Children, Fallen Children. Let me in for I come in peace. Fallen Children, Fallen Children. Let me in, let me in."

WARNINGS

 * 1) Do not laugh at or tease the children.
 * 2) Do not perform the ritual if you are a pedophile or abuse kids in any way.
 * 3) Do not light up more than 10 candles.
 * 4) Do not use any other colored candles in the ritual, all must be Yellow.
 * 5) You must be 17 or older to perform this ritual. If you are younger than 17, the children will take you in as one of their own.

 Visit the website at your own risk!