Talk:Jeff the Killer: Scars of Corruption/@comment-32168906-20170816181512/@comment-32168906-20170822112053

I simply boiled down my opinion of your story down to it's simplest form. While there were some things in here that weren't all that bad it's bogged down by the amount of stuff that were uninteresting or poorly thought out. The grubworm and canary part wasn't interesting and I am not sure why it was included when even the character itself said that it doesn't matter.