Talk:Operation Top Dog: An ORIGINAL Government Creepypasta

Okay. You wanted criticism. First off, compared to most pastas that get uploaded, you're doing great. You forgot to capitalize the word God and misspelled a couple of words but for the most part basic stuff is good. One of my favorite pieces of advice in terms of writing is to not use unnecessary words. If a word does not contribute to something vital - such as progressing the story, making sure the audience understands, mood and emotion, etc. - then get rid of it. Also watch out for cliche phrasing. That's in this story too. And I bet you onced-over on this story but do so many times. I still find errors in some of my stories that are months old and have been onced-over half a dozen times. Not to mention spell check was on while I was writing it. I, Da Cashman (talk) 05:20, June 18, 2013 (UTC)