Talk:Star Vs The Forces Of Evil:Loss/@comment-39375661-20190507045636

Hey there! It's me, SkyRunner SG-1! I made an account under the name Star Butterfly A113 and I have three stories on it you might like, however, the Tinder story and Birthday story is EXTREMELY dark and disturbing. Read those two with extreme caution! Now, my thoughts on this story... hmmmmm. I'd say... Okay to meh'. The reason for this is because there's quite a few grammar errors and quite a few cliches in it as well. Try reading my Kinect Disneyland Adventures story called No Happy Place and use the grammar style of that as an example. The Shadow Reader would probably rant on this story, but I won't do that. I'll just give suggestions on how to improve the story. Try using the same writing style as in my Kinect Disneyland Adventures story and you'll probably do just fine. Not bad for your first Star Vs The Forces Of Evil story though. I'll be doing one soon, and I think it'll interest you. See you then!