Board Thread:Writer's Workshop/@comment-10502460-20190208020204/@comment-5101683-20190220061652

The only actual critique I have is that some proofreading would improve the story. For example, I feel like the following sentence could be improved by deleting the parts in italics:

According to him they produced not just altered versions of movies and television episodes, but were also said to make their own versions of other media such as video games and comic books.

Keeping them in repeats the element of hearsay, which I feel is redundant. And even then, this is my opinion and it has no objective backing.

I think this story deserves to be on the Creepypasta Wiki for its intricate world-building and its dense inner mythology. I especially like how the story only marginally focuses on the actual lost Aristocats tape, leaving the viewer to wonder exactly what could have fazed the person who was able to view the Pink Panther one without much adverse reaction.