Talk:Spooky Village Headphone Music/@comment-1196539-20141004155318

My feedback...

Pros: The vagueness in the ending is a strong point of this pasta. The fact that the narrator's fate is never explicitly revealed leads the reader's imagination to wander, usually to the obvious worst-case scenario. The subject matter seems to be fairly unique, too, as I've never seen any other LaTale pastas.

Cons: Some structural/grammatical errors--twice I noticed quotations ending a sentence without a period. My suspension of disbelief is broken when the game's creators release a public announcement on the subject of their staff member's death, as I find it very difficult to believe any company would ever do that; it would be a PR nightmare. Maybe if the story were a reposted leak from just one of the employees who was traumatized and wanted people to know about the incident, or something, rather than an official announcement, it would be a bit more sensible. A couple of other small unrealistic details, such as the coder only being 18 and their being able to replace her in just a day's time, also interfered a bit, and I think could be revised. I would have also liked to know a little more about the killer, say, what the circumstances of Snowy's choice as a hire over his were (I'm assuming they were both competing for the job) to make his actions a little less abrupt in the storyline.