Talk:Jeff the Killer: Shades of Madness/@comment-35501667-20181030004223

That was quite the story! Revealed some great plot points and some other parts that I can’t wait to find out more upon! This was downright great!

Dat fourth wall break though; “Jeez, maybe all those shit comments on the Creepypasta Wiki are right, this guy is an edge lord.”. Just excellent :’) Is Nina gonna be your fourth wall breaking character from here on out? Because that second one she made with The Disturbingly Cruel just gave it away. Lol.

The amount of references I’m seeing here to your Hyraaq Tobit series is leaving me puzzled most of the time, I should really get a start on reading it at some point, I’d obviously need the time to read through it all unless I just listen to a narration on YouTube.

Back to the story, it is intriguing that the number Jane slipped Derrick was Dalton’s number after all, wonder why she really chose him of all people. And Drawer 9 contained Drake’s journal? Damn, never would’ve guessed after almost a year of waiting for this secret to be unveiled, haha. Other than Sawyer, I still have my suspicions that Jane is behind the entire scheme (at least to some degree) that is being implied throughout this series. Looking at Drake’s notes, this whole mind-control thing that Maxwell informed him of does make a lot of sense, either all the bizarre characters are managing to hide their true intentions really good, or they are truly just being controlled by some secret society, not to mention it would explain the extremely odd behaviour that Trent and all members of Jeff’s Killers displayed (despite being mentally ill), perhaps chief Hardy is being controlled too, the cover ups he keeps making for the sake of the town seems to be a load of bullshit, not to mention he didn’t show the public about that video Dalton and Simon found in Scars of Corruption. Again, I am seeing this recurring theme in your story, where a character’s moral role switches, Maxwell Hayden was (apparently) more innocent than we (the readers) were led to believe, somehow I just knew you would do this kind of thing towards him in particular to my very surprise, I actually thought that he of all people was unredeemable and that he knew exactly what he was doing in these events, but of course your brilliant story telling found a way to excuse this, and I’ve got to say job well done. Maybe in Jane’s story when Drake is heard yelling at someone on the phone the following line; “You just try and do something fucker!”, that could be Maxwell he was talking to, or maybe not... In the end, this whole story was planned by the characters from the very beginning, that video Dalton and Simon found in Scars of Corruption wasn’t lying, everything was set into motion, and I can’t wait to see how it’ll end, and maybe just maybe the characters will change the events that were meant to be set into motion. To think you brought this story up as a remake to a simple bad story from the Creepypasta wiki and have turned it into a conspiracy theory kind of story, making the whole JTK story unique, it’s really impressive.

Anyway, the relationship between the characters is incredible, Dalton and Nina wise. Nina is becoming more a likable character now as she is learning to become more sane, which I am liking, and as always Dalton is still the awesome character who I would really hate to see die.

Since Halloween is just a day away, I’m hoping that MrCreepyPasta will come back and read the rest of these stories from where he left off like he did the first two, they all deserve narrating.

The story has yet to end, and I can tell that it is coming soon. But from what I can presume from the ending, we’ll need another story explaining Randy’s POV of the events leading up to now, as well as explaining how the hell he ended up in Sawyer’s home, after all he is the “control variable” in Sawyer’s plan, so a story centred around him will be pretty damn important. But of course, that is just my guess ^^’

I can tell that this story will be coming to an end soon, and we’ll have yet to see both Randy and Liu’s involvement in the “large plan” that is apparently being put into motion by Jane. I cannot wait for the next expansion, as well as more amazing plot twists by you K. Banning Kellum. Happy editing as always, and also GL with your YouTube channel ;)

Btw, since I always point out that I come across spelling and grammar mistakes while reading your stories, I’ll list a few that I can remember here in order to save you the trouble of having to search for them yourself, I’ll highlight the word that should need changing in bold text:

“a long scare extending up one side”

“wearing what appear to be priest vestments”

“It was extremely loud, but did not hurt her hears.”

“I just want to thank God for reminding us that He never closes a door without opening a window!”

“Yeah, you’d be pretty lost with me.”