Board Thread:General Discussion/@comment-24303436-20130918005528/@comment-24486926-20130921041751

I can say this: It's very good for a first try, but you'll need room for improvement. (No offense)

In particular, I would enjoy knowing how Cooper got the necklace in question that made him "MadnessCrazy." The ending kinda left me on a cliffhanger, as well. Is it finished?

Also, (this doesn't bother me, but it is a grammar rule) remember to start a new paragraph when someone begins speaking. :)