Talk:A Letter/@comment-1196539-20141004161556

My feedback...

Pros: The language is very sophisticated, which makes for an interesting read. The length, I believe, is also just about perfect for the short story being presented. The pasta has a strong sense of narrative and continuity that builds up to the vague cliffhanger of an ending, which in this case, works well for the pasta. The story doesn't really bring anything new to the table in terms of it being just another one of Slenderman's victims, but the language keeps it at least somewhat engaging.

Cons: Firstly, I have a hard time trying to pinpoint when, historically, this is supposed to take place. The bulk of the language is antiquated such that it feels somewhat Victorian, or Gothic as in Dracula, but the "dost thou" early on is from much earlier in history... unless it was meant to be a Shakespearean quote I'm just not familiar with that she was reciting, or something. Then the revelation that photography exists throws everything off. If the photograph is developed that quickly, it has to be at least the early 20th century. These two details make the continuity a bit sketchy. There were a couple grammatical goofs around that could stand to be fixed, too (not many, though).