Talk:Jeff the Killer Redux/@comment-5021425-20160210002921

Let's  get into it.

This is easily the best Jeff origin story I've read, however with what it's up against, that's sadly not saying much. There are a few minor typos throughout, ex. Jeffry. The characters are much more developed though in some cases, it brings the story down. Jeff is no longer the slab of wood he was in the original and now has a personality...a crazy and unlikable personality. Yes, the biggest problem with the story is Jeff. Jeff's new personality made him almost unsympathetic at times, almost making me look forward to him burning alive. This story also repeats a mistake that MANY killer origin stories make, where the killer at the start of the story is basically already crazy, just not able to go through with his actions, however here, I feel it was more intentional and it works. Jeff starts off broken and just moves further down the path to shattering. However, his turning, despite better buildup and explanation, feels just as sudden as the other versions. Throughout the story, I am reminded of Thanos: Rising as the story seems to have a very similar set up, however, the main difference is the likability of the main character, which is where this story falls flat on. With the added details on his appearance, the whole burning seems absolutely pointless. The bullies, despite getting more development, still don't seem to talk right. How did Jeff survive burning? How did he escape the hospital? What about the wig? I also can't help but feel that the backstory would be much more interesting than the story presented here. While better than other versions, I sadly still feel this isn't the definitive Jeff Origin, but it's come much closer than others.

7.8/10