Talk:ELMO/@comment-4841454-20190714024503

Claims not to be a cliche pasta but then uses cliches like "realistically detailed" stuff, loud noises, passing off stuff as a glitch, and vowing to never watch your favorite thing again. Ok then.

But for real, one main gripe I have with this story is that it REALLY overstays its welcome. It felt like it dragged on for too long in the later parts without getting any more interesting. If you're trying to make this into an adventure and then a coming of age story, please don't. This story doesn't have a good enough pace for that.

Another gripe I have is that the mention of other unrelated media ruins the attempted creepiness. Relating something tons of other people say to Cyborg, relating the "him" to the one from PPG, but the worse has got to be "as Mrs. Potato Head in Toy Story 2 rightfully called that sort of eyes". This was dangerously unnecessary and cringe-worthy and literally made me want to stop reading. I am not kidding

That's really all I can say apart from suggesting that you actually finish a story before posting it.